Friday, October 24, 2014

Treasure what you have!

Hello. I’ve just read the most regretfull story that I’ve ever read in my life. The story was about a man who has been single for years, but every year on Christmas his ex-girlfriend would fly from Vancouver to come and see him because she still had feelings for him an she was hoping to solve things between her and him. Al tho, every year when she would come to visit he would use one of his girl friends to pose as his girlfriend so the Vancouver girl would think that he has moved on,  but she just never seemed to give up. However, years after trying the Vancouver girl just stopped coming to visit, it has been 3 years. On Christmas eve the man was invited to a friends for a party. He showed up to the party alone. He has seen one of the girls he used to pose as his girlfriend, as he tried ignoring her she yells across the room and walks up to him. She asked if he was alone, and he replied with a ‘’yes’’. The poser has said something the has woke him up and made him think. She had said, ‘’OH because you weren’t looking for one right?’’.  Right then the man new that the girl of his dreams was the Vancouver girl that has been trying to get back with him for years. The man rushed out the party, his plan was to go and call the Vancouver girl. On his way home, he starts thinking if the girl had got over him or not. Running home with regret he starts calling the girl but has difficulties. He was having trouble to call, especially sinse it was overseas. He kept trying and trying and then at 12:00 am he finally got a hold of her. He started explaining to her that he still loves her and he wants her back. By hearing crying, he then knew that she wasn’t over him. By excitement, he booked a flight to Vancouver. Sadly, 2 days before his flight, the Vancouver girls dad calls him and says that she had died from a car accident. He then started crying from regret and cursing on his luck. The moral of the story was that to never avoid something good that has been in front of you and that has been trying to get back with you for years. Treasure what you have,  time is to slow for those who wait.

2 comments:

  1. A fun take on a powerful human emotion. What made you choose this topic? I adored your poem! How long did it take you to come up with that?

    Some issues:
    - No media whatsoever.
    - Many spelling/grammar mistakes: whats vs what’s, didnt vs didn’t, isnt vs ins’t, persone vs person, devorce vs divorce, the’re vs their, etc.
    - Very small fonts size makes it hard to read. Also hard to read when your background is transparent.
    - Some awkward phrasing: ex. “Now from something you want, to avoid having to regret the action of buying an object the you want”
    - Hard to decipher the point of some of your posts at times. I like that you are writing with a ‘stream of consciousness’ style, but it is sometimes hard for your reader to connect all of your ideas together.
    - What are your sources? You say you found a lot of these stories online. Give us the websites and THEN comment on them.

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  2. This is a very sad and touching story. I agree when you say that we should treasure what we have because life is too short. I think that people never know how much they need someone untill they loose them. It`s sad that the man lost the girl in Vancouver after he wanted her back, but he waisted his time with the posing girls.

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